A Murder To Die For
By Stevyn Colgan
A darkly comic farce about a murder at a murder mystery festival
Sunday, 5 June 2016
The Name isn't the Same Part 2
Back in February I wrote a shed post (here) explaining why I've changed the name of my fictional lady detective from Magnolia Chetwynd to Millicent Cutter. The change was necessary for several reasons that only emerged once the book had got to the end of its first draft. Names are important (as I wrote about in this shedpost). And the book is much better for the change.
Well, I'm now at Draft 10, the book is 99% of what I want it to be and it's 56% funded. And I now find myself agonising over the name of my 'hero'.
When I started the book, he was a retired detective sergeant called Gordon Shunter. I liked the name Shunter. To me it said solid, dependable, slow but steady. It has a nice sound to it. Plus it's rather nice that, in Victorian times, 'mutton shunter' was slang for a police officer (Victorian slang is hilarious! Look!). The name fits the character too as he is slow and steady, not prone to jumping the gun. That said, he's smart too.
But then I got to Draft 5 and I passed the book around a group of my friends who I use as critical readers. These are people who tell me not only what they don't like and what doesn't work but also why. And they didn't like Shunter. To them it sounded like he was a bit of a dullard. The name made him sound unintresting. So I changed his name to Gordon Hawker as I figured that it sounded sharp and wise and smart.
But now I find myself wondering ... Hawker or Shunter?
This is Unbound and I believe that you, the subscribers who have put your faith (and money) in me to deliver a book you want to read, should have some say in matters like this.
So I figured I'd ask you guys ... Shunter or Hawker? Hawker or Shunter?
Or do you know of something even better?
His name is in your hands!
Comments
I like Shunter better. Perhaps a 191st name like Gary, Harold (Harry) or Charles could fit.
posted 5th June 2016
Hmmm, if he's dependable, slow & steady I much prefer Shunter, Hawker, for me, is a little 'dodgy' & too 'sharp'
posted 5th June 2016
For me, definitely "Shunter", and I'm not sure why. But what came to mind was "Shunter of the yard", which is obviously not applicable but just amused me.
Cheers Vaun X
posted 5th June 2016
There are a few old slang names for police that you could use, most of which originate in other countries. How about:
• Byling. Means peeler in Swedish.
• Heeler. Old Aussie slang.
• Peeler.
• Vics. Old US slang.
I do like Shunter though.
posted 5th June 2016
#TeamShunter
posted 6th June 2016
Think I'm on my own here lol but I prefer Hawker.
posted 6th June 2016
Think I'm on my own here lol but I prefer Hawker.
posted 6th June 2016
Hawker has all sorts of links with the infamous Vicar of Morwenstow https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Robert_Stephen_Hawker and I wouldn't be able to put those out of my mind. So #TeamShunter gets my vote.
posted 6th June 2016
#TeamShunter
1.) Go with your gut/first instincts Stevyn
2.) I have a liking of "Shunter Of The Yard" (just like Vaun earl Norman)
if I HAD to pick another name - I quite like BARKER - he sounds robust, dependable and capable :)
posted 6th June 2016
I'm team Shunter too. Think there is something fun in the fact he is sharper than his name would make him seem.
posted 6th June 2016
Definitely #TeamShunter. Sounds steady and reliable
posted 6th June 2016
I'd got #TeamShunter as well. It's a good sounding name and the tie-in with the slang is clever.
posted 6th June 2016
Yes, it's looking to be a very one-sided game, because I'm on #TeamShunter too. I agree with those who feel that Hawker is too tightly associated with predatory hunting, talons etc. If you want something from Victorian slang, and looking at your link, have you considered Chuck Chuckaboo or Arthur Arfarfanarf?
posted 6th June 2016
Shunter, for sure
posted 6th June 2016
Think I'm slightly more on the Hunter side. Shunter sort of implies shunting stuff about and getting nowhere rather than a Hawker who's sharp and smooth. I'm afraid it's the Gordon I have trouble with. Partly because I have an idiot friend called that (I love him really but he's no detective) and partly because of Jilted John!
posted 6th June 2016
I also like Duncan's suggestion - Peeler, though may be a little... 'obvious'?
posted 6th June 2016
Shunter. An expert should do better than expected. S/he should be more brilliant than anyone expects. The names Marple, Bond and Holmes are unremarkable. They did well enough.
posted 6th June 2016
Definitely not Hawker/Hunter for me. A bit macho, gung ho. Norman Purefound, no I'm joking. Hmm... Shunter. He's stolid, dependable. Why not?
PS I'm waiting until I'm a bit more solvent before pledging, but I will.
posted 7th June 2016
Mixing it up a bit with the Spoonerist,
1) Sawker (to cut well, Jamaican origin. => to persist, keep sawing away cf Columbo, "Uh, one more thing …"),
and,
2) H-hunter (think Anthony Aloysius Hancock an indecisive hunter, not quite the heat-seeking missile he dreams to be, but gets there eventually - might take some skilled writing to pull off, as t'were).
posted 8th June 2016
*to NOT cut well ∴ persisting
posted 8th June 2016
Some great suggestions there folks! Interestingly, the issue of the detective's forename has been raised by more than one of you, here and on Twitter and Facebook, so I'm reviewing that too. It may be that 'Gordon' is just plain wrong and that a more dynamic first name will solve my dilemma.
posted 10th June 2016
You might also be interested to know that, in this book, I'm doing my bit to preserve some wonderful old British surnames that are on the brink of extinction. The names Chips, Hatman, Temples, Raynott, Woodbead, Nithercott, Rummage, Southwark, Harred and Jarsdel are particularly at risk as fewer than 50 people still have them. Consequently, I've used nearly all of them in the book.
But why are they disappearing? It's perfectly understandable that forenames should ebb and flow in popularity as fashion dictates but why does a surname suddenly dip in popularity? I can understand it if a name becomes unpopular through association; plenty of people called Hitler and Shipman changed their for that very reason. But why, for example, has the surname William crashed and burned? In the 1901 UK census, William was the 374th-most common surname; one in every 1,000 people was called William. But the most recent census shows that now only 1 in 50,000 people in the UK has it. That's a 97% decrease. Where have all the Williams gone? Other surnames that have also decreased in prevalence include Cohen (-42%), Ashworth (-39%), Sutcliffe (-36%), Clegg (-34%), Butterworth (-34%), Crowther (-34%), Kershaw (-34%), Brook (-34%), Greenwood (-32%), Haigh (-31%), Pratt (-31%), Nuttal (-30%), Ingham (-30%) and Ogden (-30%).
I wonder why?
posted 10th June 2016
Paul Jeorrett (Great surname there as it happens!) mentioned the Reverend Robert Hawker. He's a character I'm quite familiar with, being a Cornishman myself, but if you'd like to hear more about his eccentricities, do listen into my chat about him on Iszi Lawrence's excellent Z List Dead List podcast here: http://www.zlistdeadlist.com/listen/#s01 (It's also on iTunes and Soundcloud)
posted 10th June 2016
Ewan - Oh I'm having Purefound as a character name! Unless you already have!
posted 10th June 2016